2011年6月9日 星期四

Discussing effects-2

  There will be a large factory which will haveseveral effects on a small town called Acton.  First of all, a great number of jobs will be open for the residents.  Consequently, it can improve the economic development of the small town.  Becides, it will bring a lot of new people to the community.  Because of that, the local authorities will built more public facilities.  Last but not the least, there will be more modern structures and it can change the small town a lot instead of remaining the original appearance.  To sum up, though it may bring some bad effects, there will be a lot of good effects on the small town. 

5 則留言:

  1. besides 拼錯
    Will+ RV build
    結論句有點笨的感覺= =

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  2. haveseveral .. have several

    will be open ...被動



    Becides,...Besides,

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  3. new people to the community.-->people 可以改成citizens.
    你的結論句~你的感想也太不誠懇了吧!!

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  4. it will bring a lot of new people 覺得people就好了

    結論句... 所以這篇到底在寫壞影響還是好影響

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  5. 有些字沒打好

    最後一句是 = = ?

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