2011年6月1日 星期三

Discussing Cause-2

  Michael Williams ran the music shop just a little more than three months.  Why he failed to run his shop well and closed it quickly?  There are several reasons which can let us understand what happened to the shop.  First of all, most of the CDs in the shop were hip-hop and rock which caught the teenagers’ eye.  However, most of the residents of the Fairfax were more than 31 years old.  Therefore, the CDs would not be popular.  In addition, the location of the shop was just 3 miles away from a shopping center that has two large music stores.  Of course, the little shop could not compare with the shopping center.  Next, Michael Williams would not accept checks or credit cards.  As far as the customers were concerned, they didn’t like to take a lot of cash with them when they were shopping.  Consequently, it was certainly not convenient for customers to buy items from the shop only by cash.  Last but not the least, the little shop was open Monday to Friday from 1 to 5 P.M.  However, there were fewest passersby walking by the shop during the period.  According to these reasons, we can understand why the little shop couldn’t last for a long time.

4 則留言:

  1. There are several reasons which can let us understand what happened to the shop.
    怪怪的 理由應該是倒閉的理由 應該寫清楚一點
    caught the teenagers’ eye +s
    compare with 應該用被動

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  2. 你一開始沒提到那間店在FAIRFAX的樓下
    你突然說那邊的居民都是老人
    沒看過資訊的人會覺得有何關聯?
    compare用主動很怪
    不是被動式就是用形容詞吧!!

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  3. 感覺原因排列順序不順

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