What a wonderful dream I had today! In my dream, I am a father, and I have three children with my wife who I love in my real life. I am an English teacher who have good salaries. My wife is also a teacher, but she majors in math. Our children are all students in preschool. They are all cute and simple-hearted. Everyday after I have no class, I go to pick them up. We always go to a park playing hide-and-seek and exercising together. When we feel tired, we go home at once, and my wife always has prepared delicious dinner waiting for us. After having dinner, my wife and I help our children check up their homework. Before they go to bed, I always read a story for them to help them sleep well. It was the best dream that I have ever had. I hope it will come true someday.
We always go to a park playing hide-and-seek and exercising together.... to play嗎?感覺怪怪的而已
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What a happy dream it is!
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Not bad!! there's just one thing you need to pay attention to.
回覆刪除In my opinion, I think this story(dream) might be pretty interesting for you because it's about your ideal life,right?
But for those readers, this just seems to be kinda normal or boring.
Try to think up some cool material which you can add to your essay, that might be able to make it more interesting.
時態錯了吧?
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你的夢很棒 很實在 你一定會實現的!!!!!!!!!! 轉折詞能夠在漂亮一點!!
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